Group Essay Collaboration

I haven't changed anything in my paragraph since either of you read it. All of my concrete details are the ones you helped me find, and my commentary is the same as i wrote on Thursday.
It would be helpful for you both to read my paragraph and comment on anything that doesn't fit or needs changed before Monday. I think all of our transitions will be fine since we are writing about three different couples, not three different things on one person.This is it:

Algernon and Cecily’s relationship is an example of pursuit of pleasure shown throughout the play. When Cecily goes to write down her and Algernon’s conversation in her diary, Algernon asks to read it. Cecily refuses him and says that “when it appears in volume form”(52) she hopes he will order a copy. This is an example of how they both want to be included in each other’s personal lives, but Cecily wants to make him wait. If she didn’t want him to read it she wouldn’t have told him to order a copy, and if Algernon didn’t want to read it he wouldn’t have asked. Then when Algernon proposes to Cecily, she mentions that they have been engaged for the last three months. She brings up that she had all of his letters in a box that she was “forced to write”(54) for him. Algernon just went along with her, which relates them in a way that they both do whatever they please to make them happy. If Algernon thought it was strange that Cecily had done this, he wouldn’t have pretended it was real. When Gwendolyn comes and her and Cecily start arguing, Cecily gives Gwendolyn the exact opposite foods from what she asked for. Likely, Algernon doesn’t let Jack eat the cucumber sandwiches in the beginning because he says they’re for Lady Bracknell, but then Algernon eats all of them. This proves how neither of them are afraid to deny someone what they want, if they themselves don’t want them to have it. They both let their own feelings go above politeness and the expectations of a host or hostess. Algernon and Cecily’s dialogue are very similar in a way that they want what they want, and they won’t accept anything less than that.

Thanks!